Dear chief
There has been fighting about who should leave and go on the horouta waka . Please send me on the waka, these are my reasons why.
Firstly, I have good eyesight so if the sea pattern changes I will report it. If there are seagulls I will tell someone. If the clouds have a slight change of colour of green or any other colour I will tell someone.
Secondly, I can fish, I have experience at fishing and I have the equipment to fish. I have caught fish in the past.
Thirdly, what good am I on an island? I am not good at hunting, I will miss my shots and probably get killed while hunting.
Don’t think about keeping me because there are no other fishes on the Horouta waka.
So please send me on the waka you’re the best chief so surely you will let me go on the horouta waka.
Hi Micah I like your wirting. but maybe could you do some paragraphs
ReplyDeletewhen I was reading your story I thought it was absolutely great although I think there could do with a bit more punctuation and I think your fonts needs to be smaller other than that I think your story is great
ReplyDeleteHi micah I like your Horuta waka story next time add some more detail to your sentences.
ReplyDeleteWow, nice work Micah I like your linking words like "firstly secondly and thirdly" but I think you should make up a cool Tonga name for the end otherwise the chief won't know who has written him a letter.
ReplyDeleteWow! nice work Micah I really like the writing mate you've done.
ReplyDeletebut on the last bit of the writing you forgot to put a capital H for Horouta.
From Levi nice work Micah
Hi Micah I really like this piece of writing and it has a lot of great language but you could add some more punctuation because then its just a really long sentence, and it would also make it even better. From Jade.
ReplyDeletehi Michael good work but you forgot to leave a capital H.
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